Is there help for this picture?

[marcao]

Gents,

I had this picture rejected: http://www.jetphotos.net/viewreject.php?id=162579
I agree that the quality was not so good, but I would like to know if there is something I can do for making it aceptable.
This is the original: http://users.hotlink.com.br/marcao/FAB2473_1.JPG
Thanks in advance.

[Freightdogg]

I gave it a shot:

[marcao]

I gave it a shot:

Thank you Freightdogg.
It is a lot better than my first try.